Tyrone show don't tell

 hello there i have been doing my show dont't tell i did great on that here is my show don't tell 

One day i played video games all day but then someone break into my house in a middle of night then my dad died because the gun shot after 5 years later i went to the airport to go to japan i stay here for 3 years and then a man went to a haunted house by 3 miles away from our house.So the man went inside the haunted house and then he was trap the door slam because their was no were out off this haunted house but then the man finds a way to get out off this haunted house he finds to get out but wait the man couldn't find a weapon to unlock the door but then the man SCREAM because he died.I went in the haunted house and then the man was not their he disappeared out of no where.The man was kidnap because i chec the holl country in japan but he’s not in japan or in new zealand that’s where i lived new zealand but i now move to japan but wait the man was in canada not in japan or new zealand.do you know how did i did i went to new zealand first i went in to the store then i found caps in their their where no caps in any store but now i found it that’s how i went to new zealand.

this is my show don't tell i did well on if you like it you say yes or if you don't like it you say no i will see you next time bye.

T H E P R E S E N T

hello there in week 1 we have been using hour present story here is my present story One dark day the boy  was focus playing on a video game but mum was here she was late to be at home the boy pause the game to open the present and mum call the telephone after mum went upstairs she put something in the present it was a puppy pop up but there is something that’s not right my puppy he only have three legs and one missing leg.The boy drop the puppy and then the puppy want’s to play with the boy and he saw the red ball then the boy continued to play the game throw the ball and the puppy run and fall over two times the puppy want’s to play fetch the boy get’s up and he was missing a leg me and my puppy play fetch at the backyard the boy throw the red ball the puppy chase after it and live happily ever after THE END. This is my story i did good on this but i did a mistake the boy pause the game to open the present and mum call the telephone that is a mistake i hightlight it so you can see it and i will see you later bye.