My first sentence is The boy plays a game flashing light gun shot pew pew bang pow the boy was focus on the game.That is my improved sentence my sentence updated is my puppy play fetch at the backyard the boy throw the red ball the puppy chase after it and levt happily ever after THE END.One more thing my boring sentence is One dark day the boy was focus playing a video game.
Wednesday, 29 July 2020
opening sentence for my story
Hello there readers we are learning to write an interesting first sentence to hook our reader.
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To support my learning I ask you to comment as follows:
1. Something positive - something you like about what I have shared.
2. Thoughtful - A sentence to let us know you actually read/watched or listened to what I had to say
3. Something thoughtful - how have you connected with my learning? Give me some ideas for next time or ask me a question.
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You have given us some great work Tyrone.I like that you have told us about what the puppy was doing and what colour ball he was chasing.
ReplyDeleteI would love to know more about the puppy🐕.I LOVE❤reading about animals.
Thanks for sharing your learning with us.
I agree because i did great on this it was from 1 month ago ok so i did The boy plays a game flashing gun shot pew pew bang pow the boy was focus on the game.if you like that's ok but if you don't like i will be sad so that's it thank you bye bye.
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